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The graph below provides information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (You should spend 20 minutes on this task).

The graph below provides information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (You should spend 20 minutes on this task).
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The line graph illustrates the
cost
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 of one kilo of bananas in
Japan
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,
France
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,
Germany
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 and the
USA
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 over a ten-year period from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the highest
price
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 for banana retailing was registered in
Japan
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while
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 the lowest
price
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 throughout the time period was in the
USA
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.
Japan
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,
France
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 and
Germany
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 have experienced wide fluctuation in the
cost
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 of bananas compared to the
USA
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 where it remained mainly stable. In 1994, the retail
price
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 for one kilo stood at $2 in
Japan
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 and
France
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while
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 costing $1.5 and $1 in
Germany
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 and the US, respectively. Afterwards,
Japan
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 experienced a rapid increase in prices reaching a peak of $3 in 1998
while
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 in
Germany
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, it dropped after the initial
price
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 to $1.2 in 1997 before reaching $ 2.7 in the following year.
On the other hand
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,
France
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 remained stable at the same
price
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,
while
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 in the US, the
cost
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 rose slightly to $1.3. From 1999 onward, the
cost
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 of bananas experienced wide fluctuations in
Japan
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,
France
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 and
Germany
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 before ending at $2 in both
Japan
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 and
France
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,
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 and $1.7 in
Germany
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.
However
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, the
USA
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 saw mild changes in prices but remained within $1-1.3 throughout the period before ending at $1.2 in 2004.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, japan, france, germany, usa, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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