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The best way to solve environmental problems would be for the current generation to accept a simpler way of life for the sake of the next generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's era, everyone wants to live in
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 comfort zone
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 using numerous electronic devices
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whether
 it's for home or travelling. Even though it creates huge environmental issues. Except in certain cases, I largely agree with the given statement. There are several reasons that
people
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simple
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 life to protect nature. First and foremost,
people
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 should not
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cut trees for
furniture
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the furniture
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 of
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house
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houses
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 and
office
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. Because of fulfilling
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 dreams,
people
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 disturb
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natural activities and it hugely
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environment
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.
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, to
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environment
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the environment
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 from pollution, there should be
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 to
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less
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 vehicles for travelling. Delving deeper, if
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 generation wants to reduce pollution for
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 healthy life
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then
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 they have to
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 public transport
instead
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 of using
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 own vehicle. By which they can save nature,
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and money
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 as well.
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, nowadays, flood
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problems
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is
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 very common because of
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 number of trees, forests are the strongest protection from floods as they can soak huge
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 of water.
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, not cutting
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 number of trees
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 the best way to save
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environment
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the environment
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 from
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 number of problems.
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, every single person
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there
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 hectic schedule. That's why, individuals prefer to
use
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 electronic gadgets to make their work more easier.
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, women
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 washing machines, chimneys and so
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 automation on
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 daily basis to save time for their office work.
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, it's
also
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 not wrong to say that accepting
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 life is very difficult for
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 generation. In conclusion,
people
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use
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 public transportation, and
use
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 simple
design
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designs
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 for their houses not using too much wood for the interior of their property. It's a great way to protect
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environment
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the environment
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 from any cause.

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You presented a clear personal opinion on the issue, which is important for task response.
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Your essay has a good structure overall, as you included an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Consumerism
  • Eco-friendly
  • Minimalism
  • Carbon footprint
  • Renewable resources
  • Conservation
  • Biodegradable
  • Deforestation
  • Emissions
  • Recycling
  • Upcycling
  • Sustainable development
  • Green technology
  • Biodiversity
  • Ecological balance
  • Overconsumption
  • Downshifting
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Climate change
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