Some people argue that holding sporting events is beneficial to countries' development. However, other people hold the opposite opinion. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
It is an irrefutable fact that our
life-style
Correct your spelling
lifestyle
show examples
has
been
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
changed
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
significantly
alterled
Correct your spelling
altered
during the
recentl
Correct your spelling
recent
decades
also
Linking Words
the world has developed in many ways.
Majority
Correct article usage
The majority
show examples
of
People
Use synonyms
arugue
Correct your spelling
argue
by saying that
housting
Correct your spelling
housing
hosting
spoting
Correct your spelling
sports
events by any
countries
Fix the agreement mistake
country
show examples
while
Linking Words
others
aruge
Correct your spelling
argue
by giving their opposite opinion of not
houst
Correct your spelling
hosting
the
games
Use synonyms
and
also
Linking Words
have
differeent
Correct your spelling
different
opinion
Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
show examples
on
development
Correct article usage
the development
show examples
on
Change preposition
of
show examples
countires
Correct your spelling
countries
. I
an
Correct your spelling
am
show examples
in complete accord by saying that
housting
Correct your spelling
housing
hosting
game in your
country
Use synonyms
as
Change preposition
at
show examples
the same time you are
also
Linking Words
developing your economy below
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
will
endeavor
Change the spelling
endeavour
show examples
to shed some light on my
view point
Correct your spelling
viewpoint
show examples
. As we say nowadays
games
Use synonyms
and sports are majorly a big department where
goverments
Correct your spelling
governments
are
also
Linking Words
giving importance to it
as well as
Linking Words
every
parents
Change to a singular noun
parent
show examples
are encourage
Change the verb form
are encouraging
show examples
their children to play. Now we talk about
Correct article usage
the opinon
show examples
opinon
Correct your spelling
opinion
Use synonyms
people
Correct word choice
that people
show examples
are increasing
there
Replace the word
their
show examples
personal interest
sports
Change preposition
in sports
show examples
. And
their
Replace the word
there
show examples
are different
variaties
Correct your spelling
varieties
variations
of sports
people
Use synonyms
do enjoy playing and
public
Correct article usage
the public
show examples
do like to watch.
For example
Linking Words
, A
country
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
host
Change the verb form
hosts
show examples
a
Correct article usage
an
show examples
olympics
Change the capitalization
Olympics
show examples
or any other
country
Use synonyms
hosts
foothball
Correct your spelling
football
, basketball, or
may be
Correct your spelling
maybe
show examples
cricket. So back to
Correct article usage
the olympics
show examples
olympics
Change the capitalization
Olympics
show examples
series held
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
every 5th year. If any
country
Use synonyms
takes the
oppourtunity
Correct your spelling
opportunity
to
host
Use synonyms
there are so many pros
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
it they have to do so
many
Correct quantifier usage
much
show examples
construction
according to
Linking Words
games
Use synonyms
which can be permanent.
Then
Linking Words
so many public comes to watch the game that means in the area where
people
Use synonyms
are visiting your
tourisum
Correct your spelling
tourism
going to rise at the same time
country
Use synonyms
will
increases
Change the verb form
increase
show examples
flight charges, hotels charges.
Linking Words
Also
Add a comma
Also,
show examples
the
country
Use synonyms
will be
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
limelight
Add an article
the limelight
show examples
for some time in
media
Correct article usage
the media
show examples
.
Linking Words
Also
Add a comma
Also,
show examples
improtant
Correct your spelling
important
point
you
Add a missing verb
is you
show examples
improve your local transportation services.
Their
Replace the word
There
show examples
are so many Pros
in
Correct word choice
and
show examples
that cons can be adjustable.
Although
Linking Words
, Now
people
Use synonyms
who are not in favour of hosting so some
people
Use synonyms
are not that developed
counrties
Correct your spelling
countries
that can
host
Use synonyms
Linking Words
this big events
Change the determiner
this big event
these big events
show examples
also
Linking Words
at the same the facilities they have to
bulid
Correct your spelling
build
the cost of it is much higher than we expect it is in millions and in billions which any
country
Use synonyms
can not afford.
Futhermore
Correct your spelling
Furthermore
,
for
Linking Words
example
Add the comma(s)
example,
show examples
India, it is
an
Change the article
a
show examples
developing
country
Use synonyms
which can
host
Use synonyms
single
games
Use synonyms
like cricket but currently can not
host
Use synonyms
Linking Words
this big bombarded events
Change the determiner
this big bombarded event
these big bombarded events
show examples
.
Conclusion
Change preposition
In conclusion
show examples
, In my
opinion
Add the comma(s)
opinion,
show examples
countries who can
afordablly
Correct your spelling
actually
Use synonyms
host
Add the comma(s)
host,
show examples
should
definetly
Correct your spelling
definitely
do it with
whole
Correct word choice
full
show examples
grace and they will increase their
tourisum
Correct your spelling
tourism
also
Linking Words
their
Change the word
the
show examples
economy of the
country
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, but the logical flow between paragraphs feels disjointed. Try to use more linking words and phrases to improve coherence.
task achievement
Some points in your argument require more development and clearer explanations. Be sure to expand upon your main ideas with relevant details.
language accuracy
There are several spelling and grammatical errors throughout the essay. Consider proofreading for common mistakes to enhance clarity and professionalism.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion presented in the essay, and you made an attempt to discuss both sides of the argument.
task achievement
The examples of sporting events like the Olympics and the mention of tourism indicate good awareness of the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: