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The chart presents the number of international students enrolled in four major Australian universities from 2010 to 2020. Key Details: University of Sydney: Had 25,000 international students in 2010, rising steadily to 50,000 in 2020. University of Melbourne: Started at 20,000 in 2010, with moderate growth to 35,000 in 2020. University of Queensland: Enrolled 15,000 students in 2010 but had only slight growth to 18,000 in 2020. Australian National University (ANU): Had the lowest number of international students, increasing from 10,000 to 15,000 over the decade.

The chart presents the number of international students enrolled in four major Australian universities from 2010 to 2020. Key Details: University of Sydney: Had 25,000 international students in 2010, rising steadily to 50,000 in 2020. University of Melbourne: Started at 20,000 in 2010, with moderate growth to 35,000 in 2020. University of Queensland: Enrolled 15,000 students in 2010 but had only slight growth to 18,000 in 2020. Australian National University (ANU): Had the lowest number of international students, increasing from 10,000 to 15,000 over the decade.
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The chart illustrates the
number
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 of international
students
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 enrolled in four major Australian universities from 2010 to 2020.
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, the
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 of Sydney had the highest
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 of international
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,
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 the Australian National
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ANU
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) had the lowest.
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, in terms of growth rate,
ANU
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's enrollment increased more significantly than that of the
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 of Queensland (UQ). In 2010, the
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 of Sydney (USyd) enrolled 25,000 international
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, and
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number
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 doubled to 50,000 by 2020, making it the largest recipient of overseas
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.
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, the
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 of Melbourne (UniMelb) saw a steady rise from 20,000 to 35,000. Meanwhile, the
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 of Queensland (UQ) experienced only a slight growth, increasing from 15,000 to 18,000, making it the slowest-growing
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 in terms of international enrollment.
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,
ANU
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, which had the fewest international
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overall
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, saw an increase from 10,000 to 15,000, surpassing UQ’s growth rate. In conclusion, USyd had the highest
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 of international
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,
while
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ANU
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 had the lowest.
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, UQ exhibited the slowest increase in international enrollment over the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, university, anu with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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