Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 word
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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic. Make it explicit that you strongly agree with the statement at the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Try to develop your points in a more structured way. Each paragraph should ideally focus on one main idea and expand on it in detail.
coherence and cohesion
Review your use of linking words and phrases to create smoother transitions between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure. Some sentences were unclear or fragmented, which affected the overall readability of your essay.
task achievement
You provided relevant personal examples that illustrated your points effectively, such as your experience in Canada and your friend’s hospital visit.
task achievement
You show a good understanding of the challenges that language barriers can create, which is a key aspect of the prompt.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite