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The graph below gives information of the numbers of participants for different activitirs at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information of the numbers of participants for different activitirs at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the
number
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 of
people
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 joining several types of activities in a social centre located in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall
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, the majority of the activities (film club, table tennis, and musical performances) experienced an increase throughout the year
while
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 amateur dramatics saw a decline and martial arts showed
stable
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 trend but with fluctuation. Over the span of 20 years, the film club consistently had the highest
number
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 of participants
while
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 amateur dramatics became the least preferred
activity
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. In 2000, the
number
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 of
people
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 joining film club
activity
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 was around 65
people
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.
This
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number
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 declined slightly to nearly 60
people
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 in 2010 before reaching almost 70 in 2020. Table tennis participants in 2000
was
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 less than 20
people
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, but there was a significant uplift from 2010 to 2020, resulting in more than 50
people
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 joining the
activity
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 and eventually, table tennis became the second-highest preferred
activity
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. Other than these two, musical performances
also
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 saw an incline from zero in 2010 to almost 20
people
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 in 2020. Martial arts were the activities that experienced a fluctuation, starting at around 35
people
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 in 2000, and ending at a similar
number
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 of
people
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 in 2020.
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, amateur dramatics that was participated by more than 25
people
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 in 2000 experienced a steady decline until 2020 landing at around 10
people
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 after increasing slightly in 2005.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, activity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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