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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graphs show the percentage of
households
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 with electrical
appliances
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, and the number of
hours
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 of weekly
housework
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 in one
coutry
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country
 between 1920 and 2019.
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, the percentage of
households
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 with
appliances
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 rose significantly throughout the period, and the number of
hours
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 of
housework
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 decreased relatively. By 1920, the highest percentage of
appliances
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 in
households
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 was in
washing
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the washing
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machine
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machines
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, at around 40%, followed by
vacum
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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about
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at about
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 30%.
Refrigerator
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Refrigerators
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 were noticeable as the least popular, at around 3%, resulting in the weekly
hours
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 of
housework
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 that accounted for 50
hours
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. By 1940, the use of electrical
appliances
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 grew significantly to just around 55%, and the
hours
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 of
housework
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 fell to just 35%.
This
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 trend still increased by 1960 and
then
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stabled
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 by 1980. The most popular appliance in 1980 was
refrigerator
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a refrigerator
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 all
households
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 had it, followed by
vacum
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 at around 90% but it fully rose to 100% by 2019. Washing
machine
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machines
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 experienced the lowest at just below 65% and stayed similar range until 2019. The number of
hours
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 of
house work
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housework
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 reflected the opposite pattern from the use of
appliances
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 from 50
hours
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 in 1920 to just 20
hours
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 in 1960, and
the
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they
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 remained around 15
hours
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 throughout the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, appliances, hours, housework with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership of electrical appliances
  • steadily increased
  • dramatically decreased
  • correlating the rise
  • became common
  • households
  • prevalence
  • technological advancements
  • increased affordability
  • household chores
  • labor-saving devices
  • allocated for housework
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