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Over the last few decades, there has been an increase in international tourism. Some people think that tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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In recent years, international
tourism
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 has increased a lot. Some people believe that
tourism
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 is good for local communities and should be encouraged. I agree with
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 idea to some extent, but there are
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 some challenges that must be considered.
Tourism
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 can bring many benefits.
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it helps the local economy by creating jobs in hotels, restaurants, and shops.
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 provides income for many people who live in tourist areas.
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,
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 can improve local infrastructure,
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 as better roads and transportation, which benefits everyone, not just
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.
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,
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also
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 has some negative effects. In popular tourist destinations, there can be overcrowding, which makes life difficult for local people. The local environment can
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 suffer, as
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 often cause pollution and damage to natural areas.
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, too many visitors can harm fragile ecosystems or historical sites.
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, some
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 may not respect local cultures, leading to the loss of traditions and customs. In conclusion,
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tourism
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 has many positive effects, it
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 comes with challenges. I believe
tourism
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 can be beneficial for local communities if it is well-managed. Governments and
tourists
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 should work together to protect the environment and respect local cultures to make sure that the benefits of
tourism
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 are lasting and sustainable.

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task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points about the negative effects of tourism.
coherence and cohesion
Consider adding a transition sentence between paragraphs to enhance the flow of ideas.
task achievement
The essay presents a balanced view, acknowledging both the benefits and drawbacks of tourism.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the essay is clear, with a defined introduction, body, and conclusion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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