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The pie chart below shows a frequance of US adult's online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferances.

The pie chart below shows a frequance of US adult's online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferances.
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The data shows
expenditure
Correct article usage
the expenditure
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 habits of adults in the US and
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the preferance
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preferance
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preference
of
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for
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 remote purchases.
Overall
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. the are roughly less frequent individuals who allocate their income
on
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to
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 online shopping.
Furthermore
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, the far mentioned individuals contributed about almost
two fifths
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two-fifths
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,
whereas
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 grown-ups
who
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whom
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 weekly shops showed a percentage at just 15
percent
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per cent
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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