Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many
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think that low-cost airlines offer normal basic
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to travel unlimited whenever they
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and make it more comfortable.
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, Some others believe that cheap airfares should be stopped
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and environmental
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Puls, and global warming. My point of view, I will discuss both and I will share my opinion. Affordable airlines allow ordinary
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to
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their dreams. majority of the population in the world is middle-class
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the high cost of living expenses in
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modern world, recent research has proved that 70% of family
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is breaking cause of higher amounts like housing costs, daily needs, education and other technology necessary but
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affordable
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flight makes more comfortable to have a better
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to the middle-class
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and have a higher chance in succeeding family
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not only rich
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can have a good
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everyone disserve it. Some others believe that
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pollution
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is caused by low-cost airlines because most
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travel frequently and brings other natural damage like single usage of plastic more
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in a particular tourist area continually raising the cost of living in that area like transport, import and export puls, housing cost, fuels, etc.. and damaging the parks and beaches and other some historical places I agree with both views but offering
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tickets only causes environmental damage makes it hard to believe, there are many other ways to control environmental
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issues
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plastics
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living in
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systems and having the best quality of fuel can bring
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pollution
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control.

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Improve the clarity of your thesis statement to explicitly state your opinion on the issue. This will help guide your readers through your argument more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Work on linking your ideas more fluidly. Using transitional phrases can help create a smoother flow between paragraphs and ideas.
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Provide specific examples and further details to support your main points, particularly in the discussions about the advantages and disadvantages of low-cost airlines. This will strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay addresses both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced understanding of the topic.
task achievement
You have introduced important themes, such as environmental impact and social implications, which are relevant to the discussion.

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