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The maps show changes in the village of Meadowside and the town of Fonton from 1962 to now. Assel

The maps show changes in the village of Meadowside and the town of Fonton from 1962 to now. Assel
The map depicts the transformation of
Meadowside
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village
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 and the city of
Fonton
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 from 1962 to
present
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the present
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.
Overall
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, the
Meadowside
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village
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Village
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 and
Fonton
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 are perfectly developed and it is clear significant changes were made
buildings
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. The
two
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areas
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 were reformed thoroughly, seeing necessary modifications for the people of these towns. In 1962,
Meadowside
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 was a small
village
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 located to the west of
Fonton
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, with no clear connections between the
two
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areas
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. By 1985, significant developments had occurred. A new road connected
Meadowside
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 to
Fonton
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, and a housing estate, leisure complex, and superstore were built around
Meadowside
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. Despite these developments,
that
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the
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two
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areas
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 remained separate. In the present day,
Meadowside
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 has expanded
further
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 and is now referred to as
Meadowside
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 suburbs. Additional infrastructure includes a hotel, a railway station, and a business park, which have been constructed in the space between
Meadowside
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 and
Fonton
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. These developments have effectively merged the
two
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areas
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 into a larger, more urbanized region.
Overall
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,
Meadowside
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 and
Fonton
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 have undergone extensive urbanization over the years, transitioning from a small, isolated
village
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 and town to a well-connected and developed urban hub.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meadowside, village, fonton, two, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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