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The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information on global electricity production from five renewable sources—geothermal, wind, solar, hydraulic, and bio-mass—between 2009 and 2012.
Overall
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, hydraulic
power
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 generated the highest amount of electricity throughout the period,
while
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 solar
energy
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, despite starting with the lowest output, experienced the most significant growth. Wind
energy
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 saw a substantial increase, rising from 276.4
TWh
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 in 2009 to 534
TWh
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 in 2012, nearly doubling over the four years. Solar
power
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 showed the most dramatic rise, from just 21
TWh
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 in 2009 to 104.5
TWh
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 in 2012, indicating a fivefold increase. Meanwhile, bio-mass and geothermal
energy
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 grew at a slower pace, with bio-mass increasing from 246.8
TWh
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 to 326.2
TWh
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 and geothermal
energy
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 rising gradually from 67.4
TWh
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 to 70.4
TWh
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. Hydraulic
power
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,
although
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 the dominant source, showed only a modest increase from 3329
TWh
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 in 2009 to 3663.4
TWh
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 in 2012. In summary, all renewable
energy
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 sources experienced growth, with wind and solar
power
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 showing the most significant increases,
while
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 hydraulic
power
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 remained the largest contributor to global electricity production.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, energy, twh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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