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In Some countries, some people are renting accommodation, while others are buying their own homes. Does renting an accommodation have more advantages or more disadvantages than buying a place?

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The issue of renting or buying a
house
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 is widely debated. In certain regions,
while
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 people
chose
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 to
rent
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 a home
instead
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 of buying them,
other
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others
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 purchase their own accommodation. It both
have
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has
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 some benefits and setbacks, but I believe that owning a
house
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 is more advantageous since it is a
life time
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lifetime
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 investment.  On the one hand, with the current world economy, buying a
house
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 requires high wages. Today's conditions are a lot more difficult than
the
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 past.
Also
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, it was very common to buy a
house
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 with an average salary.
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, currently, a
subtantial
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substantial
 number of communities have to save their earning to have their own
house
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.
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, paying
montly
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monthly
 to a
house
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 is a great alternative.
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, it can contribute to negative consequences.
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, the original
house
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 owner will always have a word, they must first confirm the decisions about the construction that the renter will make.
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, since there is no gain from
a
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apply
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rent
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has
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, it will stay as
a
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an
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expanditure
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expenditure
.
On the other hand
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, owning
a
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an
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accomodation
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accommodation
 place has positive aspects. To illustrate,
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its
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apply
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economic reasons, renting a
house
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 is relatively risky since the
house
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 owner can decide to end the contract. To elaborate, even though everyone should follow certain rules,
this
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 may not
be always be
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 the case. A primary example of
this
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 was experienced by my mother.
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 they were living in a
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rent
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rented
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house
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, their renter decided to end the contract suddenly. Since it was in the middle of winter with strong snow storms, it was challenging for them to move and find a new home. In conclusion, renting an accommodation place has some benefits. In my perspective, purchasing it is a lifetime investment
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 of
rent
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. İt is a lot more advantageous and it
also
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 gives people the option to profit from it.

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language
Make sure to proofread for grammar and spelling errors, such as 'subtantial', 'expanditure', and 'accomodation'.
content
Strengthen your arguments by presenting more specific advantages and disadvantages of renting versus buying, to enhance clarity and depth.
style
Try to maintain a more formal tone and avoid colloquialisms, such as 'a lot more' or 'challenge for them'.
content
You provide a clear personal opinion on the topic, which is an important aspect of task response.
example
Your experience regarding your mother's renting situation is a strong example that adds authenticity to your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordability
  • flexibility
  • maintenance
  • financial commitment
  • investment
  • stability
  • sense of ownership
  • property value
  • mortgage
  • rental agreement
  • tenancy
  • security deposit
  • real estate market
  • housing market
  • housing loan
  • homeownership
  • residential property
  • landlord
  • tenant
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