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The given line graph illustrates the travel to and form the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in the year 1999.

The given line graph illustrates the travel to and form the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in the year 1999.
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The charts provide information about the number of
visitors
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 and
travellers
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 to and from the UK, and
favorable
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countries
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 visited by the
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british
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British
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 between 1979 and 1999.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the figures
of
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the
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british
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British
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travellers
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was
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were
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 higher than
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visitors
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for visitors
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 from other
countries
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 over 20 years, and France was the most popular
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countries
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country
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by
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the
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british
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British
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travellers
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. Looking at the data in more detail, the number of
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british
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British
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travellers
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 drastically increased from 13
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millions
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million
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 in 1979 to 53
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millions
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million
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 in 1999.
In contrast
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, the figure
of
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for
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visitors
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 who
was
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were
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 from other foreign
countries
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 slightly rose from 10
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millions
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million
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 in 1979 to almost 30
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millions
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million
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 in 1999. Turning to the five remaining data sets, over 10
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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the
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british
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British
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visitors
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 travelled
France
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to France
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 in 1999,
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and following
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following
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and
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this
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9
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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british
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British
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travellers
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 visited Spain in the same period.
Additionally
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, the number of
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UK
visitors
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 was 4
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millions
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million
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at
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in
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 the United States of America, 3
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millions
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million
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at
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in
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 Greece,
lastly
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millions
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million
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at
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in
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 Turkey, which was the smallest portion of
at
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apply
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all.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, travellers, countries, british, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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