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Band 4.5

‏ somr say that today’s life is better than it will be in the future; othehrs disagree and say that in the future life will be better tha now. Discuss and include your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that
life
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development
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development is
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 continuous.
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 it is a commonly held belief that
nowdays
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nowadays
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 it is
a
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better than it will be in the
future
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, there is
also
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 an
arguement
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argument
 that in
thr
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the
future
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life
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ot
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it
 will be better than
present
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the present
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.
This
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 essay will analyse
this
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On
one
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the one
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 hand, some
people
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 consider that now
life
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 is better
due to
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 the huge growth in
industry
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the industry
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.
In other words
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, industry
development
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help
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people
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 to do their daily
task
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tasks
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 in
virous
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various
sector
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sectors
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such
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 as work
school
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and school
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, individuals
becom
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become
 rely on
machins
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machines
 to aid them.
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,
in
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curent
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current
 days
people
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 use the
machiens
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machines
 to
takr
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take
hollydayd
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holiday
holidays
 from their work, they just
resevation
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reservation
ticket
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tickets
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 from
airport
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the airport
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 and travel by
arooplane
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aeroplane
. On the
othe
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other
 hand, some
people
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belief
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believe
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 the
future
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life
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it
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apply
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will be better than
nowdays
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nowadays
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decause
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because
 of the
development
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in
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of
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 technology. It is
also
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 possible to say that artificial
intellegenc
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intelligence
 will help us to make our
live’s
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lives
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 easier and
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more confortable
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confortable
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comfortable
 in many
path
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paths
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such
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 as health care.
Moreover
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,
the
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future
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 innovations in
outspace
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out space
our space
machiens
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machines
 will help us to
exploration
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explore
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 and
teast
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test
 medical
experment
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experiments
 with a high degree of control.
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, if
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a seintest
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seintest
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scientist
sentest
want
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wants
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 to
teast
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test
 new
tretment
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treatments
 for
diseaes
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diseases
disease
, they will
be
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travel
outspaece
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outpaced
 by
machiens
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machines
machine
 and try
it
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them
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 there. In
conclosion
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conclusion
, there are no easy answers to
this
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 question. On
balanc
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balance
, I tend to believe that
future
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 days will be best ever because of
development
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 in
life
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.

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language
Proofread for spelling and grammatical errors to enhance clarity. For example, 'nowdays' should be 'nowadays', and 'hotel' should be 'holidays'.
content
Ensure ideas are fully developed. When discussing the future, include specific examples and elaboration on how technology will improve life.
structure
Organize your paragraphs more clearly, distinctively separating points about the present and the future for better flow.
content
The essay presents both viewpoints on the topic, showing an understanding of the prompt.
content
You express your own opinion clearly at the end, which is important for IELTS task response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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