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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.
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The maps illustrate the
developmets
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development
developments
to
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 Queen Mary Hospital between 1960 and 2000. It is readily apparent that cancer
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centre
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 became huge size
trhoughout
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throughout
 the period,
while
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hospital
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hospitals
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 remained the same.
To begin
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 with, In 1960,
shopping
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the shopping
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centre
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 and hospital
are
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were
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 located close to
main
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 road with a lane separating those buildings from farmland and
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car
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the car
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park
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. By 1980,
shopping
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the shopping
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centre
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demolished
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 and replaced by
cancer
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a cancer
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centre
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 pharmacy.
Hospital
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The hospital
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 and
car
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park
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 remained
unchangable
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unchangeable
 and
farmland
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the farmland
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have
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 transformed into a nursing school.
On the other hand
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,
cancer
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the cancer
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centre
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 expanded
size
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in size
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 and relocated to
nursing
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the nursing
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 school,
whereas
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nursing
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the nursing
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 school condensed
size
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its size
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 and relocated next to
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car
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the car
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park
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,
also
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car
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park
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has been
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was
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 reduced by
a
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half in 2000.
In contrast
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,
pharmacy
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the pharmacy
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 is situated near
hospital
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the hospital
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had
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has
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 maintained the same and
hospital
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the hospital
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had
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has
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reamined
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remained

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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