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The charts below show the favorite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the favorite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of
population
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the population
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 who like to
takeaways
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takeaway
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 food from various restaurants in Canada from1960 to 20015. It is
clearly
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 that, the biggest percentage of people who take away was Chinese. The second largest cycle was Indian food.
While
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, Mexican, Japanese, and Greek were the lowest figure among other restaurants.
To begin
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 with, There was around 34 per
cent
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 of Chinese
who
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apply
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favourite takeaways.
In addition
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, Indian society
account
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accounts
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of
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for
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 26% of the total. The third biggest number were those who never
order
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 by nearly 11 per
cent
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. There was exactly 10 per
cent
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 of
Italian
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Italians
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 prefer takeaways. There was nine per
cent
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 of
Persian
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Persians
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 love to eat
out side
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outside
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the
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apply
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restaurants in Canada.
On the other hand
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,
Thi
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the Thi
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 community were just approximately 3 per
cent
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.
While
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 Mexican, Greek and Japanese were the smallest
figure
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 by just around 1 per
cent
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 among other nationalities in that period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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