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In recent years, farming practice has changed to include methods such as factory farming and the use of technology to improve crops. Some people believe these developments are while others regard them as dangerous and advocate a return to more traditional farming methods. Discuss both the points of view and give your opinion.

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In today's world, there are many controversial opinions about the technological methods used in agriculture
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 as factory production. Others think that implementing computerized tech will spoil the farmland and traditional processes. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views and share my opinion. In
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 fashion world, using technology will cover the
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 shortages globally
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, using the tractor in farming will save time and produce more
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 for human needs.
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, a farmer can make more money by using the latest advanced tech, because he doesn't want to depend on
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 for the crops he can save money on wages.
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, he can take more international contracts to supply
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cause
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because
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 he can produce
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 in short periods in big quantities and can supply globally. Some others believe that using chemicals in farming land can cause significant damage permanently because of the overuse of toxic substances. plus, genetically modified
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 can cause more diseases for humans and nature leading to global threats. Recent research has proven in Japan that less use of chemicals in foods can bring a strong world. In my opinion, having a healthy life is better than making money or producing
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 globally because health is wealth having a traditional
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 process
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 much better than using tech.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction to set the reader's expectations. Your opinion should be clear and distinct.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow between ideas by using linking words effectively. For example, transitions like 'Furthermore', 'On the other hand', and 'In contrast' can guide the reader through your arguments better.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or statistics to support your arguments about both factory farming and traditional methods. Mention recent developments or case studies, which will strengthen your discussion.
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You successfully highlighted both sides of the debate regarding technological advancements in farming and traditional methods, which is key for a balanced discussion.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction clearly outlines the topic, and your structure of discussing both views is a good approach to the essay question.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • factory farming
  • global demand
  • sustainable
  • ethical implications
  • antibiotic resistance
  • genetically modified organisms (GMOs)
  • precision farming
  • crop yields
  • biodiversity loss
  • food sovereignty
  • technological advances
  • resilience
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