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In a world increasingly driven by technology, to what extent do you agree that traditional art forms are losing their relevance? Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In current society, with the rapid and widespread development of AI, computers can create decent
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 some drawing jobs are no longer necessarily done by human hands, I disagree that traditional
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 forms are losing their relevance. I believe that traditional
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 techniques are still vital in many occasions.
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 with, a hand-drawn work has significant power to attract viewers. The spectators often enjoy the hidden meanings of the
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.
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, the portrait of Mona Liza looks like a normal smile at a glance. The facial expression,
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, could convey the opposite message when you spend more time watching it. The little shadow or dark
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 on the face could tell interesting stories and meanings,
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 AI only focuses on the surface of things and copy it. To
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 end, historical masterpieces are all
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, artists' involvement in creating is a must with their brushing and
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choice
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 in the world of
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. I certainly admit that recent AI graphics are of high quality and able to produce mediocre products. It is convenient since easy drawings can be created on screens within a minute without a
hussle
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 of outsourcing. to be exact, if you are in need of a simple painting, tons of automatic drawing applications are available online. The machine-made paintings,
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, would not be able to impress people and touch their
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, some
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 of
well-known
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painter
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 can make people cry, but never AI-generated
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lack
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 of a
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story
 inside the brushes and
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To sum up
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, technology has certainly shown a significant development over the decade and is able to produce
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 efficiently. The quality of traditional
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 techniques by humans,
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, still outweighs the one by AI.
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 is because of the sophisticated skills of professional
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task achievement
Elaborate more on your points, providing a deeper analysis of why traditional art remains relevant compared to AI-generated art.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure your introduction clearly presents both sides of the argument before stating your opinion more definitively.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the flow between paragraphs by using clearer transition phrases to guide the reader through your argument.
task achievement
You have effectively highlighted the emotional impact of traditional art, which is a strong point in your argument.
task achievement
Your comparison between AI and traditional art adds a compelling dimension to your essay.
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