Some people think it is better for children to grow up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable

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There has always been a
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the individuals
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think
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for their children to
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in the city
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contemplation is that life in the village is more compatible. Some consider that there are some benefits behind
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about it and
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contemplate that it has cons
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pros. I am in complete agreement with the former standpoint and in the forthcoming paragraphs I shall explain my position.
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, I will start by looking at the advantages. One of the major plus points of living in the city is the fact that
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are many
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and a lot of interesting things suitable for children.
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and wide range of study
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schools
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their knowledge. As for
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living in the country, it
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has its own good points.
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, There is fresh air and good communication among the people. People are very friendly and united
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other. In my
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to quality of their knowledge.
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there are unambiguous advantages like the one mentioned above,
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are
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a great deal and
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it can be stated that
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are extremely noisy and harmful gases out from the factories have
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effect on children's health and brain in the city.
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of living in the country
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there are not only a few
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phenomenon but
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban environment
  • diverse opportunities
  • cultural experiences
  • educational facilities
  • career prospects
  • convenient transportation
  • sense of community
  • natural beauty
  • clean air
  • peaceful atmosphere
  • close-knit community
  • limited resources
  • lack of cultural activities
  • lack of educational opportunities
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • less social interaction
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