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Band 4.5

Some people believe that not enough household waste is recycled and that the only way to increase recycling rates is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There is an undeniable fact about today’s world and it
would be
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 nothing but
plastic
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over
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usage
as a result
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 of humans’ recent activities.
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, recent issues with waste management
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 dumping
garbage
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 in the oceans or burning them, made some people concerned about
environment
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. Nowadays, some individuals with whom I agree, argue that governments are responsible
to deal
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 with
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 matter by recycling
the
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garbage
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.
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 with, we have to consider that a great quantity of dangerous
wastes
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waste
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, is made out of
plastic
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, which does not
get
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dissolved
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 in
the
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nature. So, the only solution to
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 problem is minimizing the amount of produced
plastic
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.
This
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 would be achievable by reusing it for other products, which would decrease the need for new
plastic
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 and
also
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prevents
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 the old object from ending up in the sea or underground. I believe that most of the countries around the globe
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 are not utilizing their full potential to recycle any waste.
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, in countries like Germany, where people are some have forced to
enroll
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 in recycling plans, we can see
a great reductions
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a great reduction
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of
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garbage
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 dumping.
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, people are charged for every
plastic
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bottles
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 they use. But, when they return it, the extra charge goes back to them. If more nations were to use
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 methods, there would be so much less damage done to the environment and different animals living in lands or oceans.
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, in my opinion, not enough countries are using any methods of recycling or they do not use restricted laws in
favor
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 of waste reduction. These rates of
garbage
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 production could bring vital problems for the human race in the near future, by contaminating our food and water.

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task achievement
Ensure that your arguments directly address the prompt. Highlight more specifically how government policies can increase recycling rates.
coherence
Work on connecting your points more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. This will enhance overall coherence.
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Provide more concrete examples from other countries or solutions that could be implemented, in addition to Germany, to support your points. Specific examples strengthen arguments.
content
The topic is relevant and timely, showing awareness of a crucial environmental issue.
task achievement
The use of examples, such as the recycling system in Germany, adds clarity to your argument.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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