Some believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time . This can benefit teenagers and the community as well . Do you agree or disagree.

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today
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world
teenagers
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are much different than those who were
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few
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years back.
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availability of advanced technology and
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this unusual
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teenagers
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. Most of them are not having
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humanity
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in their heart. They do not think about others
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as elders,
childrens
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children
children's
and other
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. And
also
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some of them are
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to
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drugs in their early teenage.
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completely
destroy their education and they
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to do a job,
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some money to buy drugs. In under-developing
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countries like Sri Lanka, Bangladesh and Maldives critically experienced
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situation. And
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those
teenagers
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looking for easy money, that creates tense situation within the younger generation. Because of
this
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,
community
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works
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work
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such
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as helping others and unpaid renovation projects or some other
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will create good human
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in the end.
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school
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level and university
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this
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a trend.
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good example
for
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that is
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scouting. In their early career Scouts should have to go to the
community
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and
have to
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do some
helpings
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helping
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or good
works
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including helping elderly
peoples
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people
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,
clearing
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and clearing
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houses,
gardens
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and gardens
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without getting any payment.
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universities some subjects
offer
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as part of
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students'
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academic activities like Social
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works
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work
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. In those
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courses,
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they have to do something
to
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for
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community
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the community
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. In
reasent
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recent
years students
did
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some interesting
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works
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work
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, renovation of some public places like bus halts,
toilets
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and some others have
been
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repaire
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repaired
repair
univerity
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university
hostel washing machines. And students thought by themselves and doing some social welfare programmes
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some of them are
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supplying
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utencils
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utensils
to rural schools, some are building new
clss rooms
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classrooms
, libraries or computer facilities.
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very
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kind
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of actions
giving
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benifits
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benefit
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both
teenagers
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and the
community
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as well. For
an
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example
to
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the
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teenagers
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they
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gain some good habits and create good human
being
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beings
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carries
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with sympathy. For
the
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society
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society,
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it is
definetly
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definitely
have
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good
benifits
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benefits
because as mentioned above
those
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social welfare could nothing but good. And most importantly the image
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the younger generation will change in advance.
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yes, we all have to agree with that opinion, unpaid
community
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work is
some what
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somewhat
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essential in different
different
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scales for
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teenagers
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. Governments should have to encourage institutes and
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the younger generation to do
community
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work and
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the elders should have to appreciate their hard and good work.

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Language
Work on improving grammar and spelling to enhance clarity. For example, change 'huminity' to 'humanity' and 'addict' to 'addicted.'
Content
Clarify and strengthen your arguments by using more specific examples to illustrate each point. This will help readers understand your views better.
Coherence
Structure your essay more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea, with supporting details clearly organized.
Content
You have demonstrated a strong understanding of the topic and offered relevant ideas about community work and its benefits.
Content
Your use of examples, particularly regarding scouting and university programs, adds depth to your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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