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Band 5.5

You want to improve your knowledge of foreign language which can help you at work Write a letter to a foreign language teacher and say Where did you hear about the teacher Why do you want to learn a foreign language Ask some questions about the course cost

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The reason why I am writing
this
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 letter to you is that
,
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 for several years I have wanted to participate in foreign language courses. I
was
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found information about your lessons in language on your telegram page and I liked your teaching style. There are a few reasons for
this
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 ambition. first of all the company I worked for is downsizing and learning English will help me
which
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keep my job.
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Secondly
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 I have an opportunity to study abroad for 1 month, and for
this
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, I must learn English at a level of communication. So I want to attend your classes, and what I want to know is that you have not disclosed the price of the courses on your official internet page, but I request you to tell me the price of all your English-related courses. I hope you will reply to me soon. yours faithfully Nurmuhammad

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coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure correct capitalization for the first word of sentences and proper nouns.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use more varied sentence structures to enhance engagement.
task achievement
Clarify the specific information you seek about the course in a more structured manner, possibly breaking it into bullet points for clarity.
task achievement
You expressed a clear reason for wanting to learn a foreign language, which adds to the effectiveness of your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a polite tone and a clear purpose, which is excellent for this type of communication.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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