Today there is increasing concern over environmental problems. While some people believe that they must be solved on a domestic level, others think that only through international cooperation can environmental issues be dealt with. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the contemporary era, the best way to protect the environment is a heated topic. Some individuals think that natural problems must be resolved on a national level.
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, others argue that dealing with these problems with the
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natural issues on a domestic level is crucial.
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is effective because it contributes to the development of a country and
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a part of reducing global warming which
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one of the most major environmental
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, one country can be more
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if people in that country have
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of protecting
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so promoting and raising awareness to everyone is truly important.
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remedy does not only come from individual responsibility but
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the government must apply policies about natural preservation for citizens.
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that worldwide horizon ranks the first to approach any problems on
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the most powerful remedy.
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why I think global
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collaboration
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could be
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enforced
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instantly and be the most impactful remedy.
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, if worldwide cooperation is established, more individuals on
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can gain
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awareness of pollution. In summary,
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I concede that there is some merit in solving environmental crises, I firmly believe that international cooperation can approach the aforementioned issue more useful.

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The structure of the essay is generally clear and easy to follow.
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You present both views of the argument, showcasing balanced reasoning.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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