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Some people think that the universities must only accept student with high mark, while others believe that universities must accept students of all ages regardless of their previous grades. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is true that
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 knowledge is infinite and has no
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.
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 a section of society contends that educational institutions should give admissions to only brilliant learners,
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 believe that policies should be the same for all despite
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the factors
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 as age or scores. The impending essay will
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elaborate
 on both
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view points
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 before forming my opinion.
To begin
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 with, admitting students acquiring high academic scores uplifts the status and standards of the institution.
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 trend tremendously attracts students worldwide for
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enrollment.
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,
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profiting
 both socially and economically. To illustrate, top universities of
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pre-requisities
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prerequisites
 for international students which means prioporities would be only given to scholars who
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 calibre and can afford high fee structures which means that a country's GDP will surge.
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,
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curriculum
 will be
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 and similar for everyone and
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task achievement
Ensure the introduction clearly outlines your stance and briefly summarizes the points you will discuss. This will improve clarity and set the reader's expectations.
coherence and cohesion
The essay could benefit from clearer transitions between points. Using linking words can help connect your ideas more logically.
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Try to include more specific examples to support your arguments. This will strengthen your points and demonstrate your understanding of the topic better.
content
The essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic.
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You have made a solid attempt to discuss both sides of the argument, which is essential for this type of essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Meritocracy
  • Curricula
  • Inclusive
  • Mature students
  • Disadvantaged backgrounds
  • Workforce
  • Holistic review
  • Portfolios
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Diverse student body
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