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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph presents data on the number of tourists who
traveled
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travelled
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 to a Caribbean island over the period from 2010 to 2017.
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, the total
visitors
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 to the island increased significantly over the period , with a notable
rose
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 in those who
staying
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stayed
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in
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on
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 cruise ships.
Meanwhile
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 the number of tourists staying at
isle
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the isle
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 grew steadily, with little fluctuations. The number of people who
stays
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stay
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at
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on
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 ships and those staying on the island was relatively small, 0.25
million
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 and 0.75
million
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 , respectively. Between
years
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the years
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 2010 and 2013 , amount of cruise
visitors
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demonstrates
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fluctuaction
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,
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other
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others
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 grew moderately hitting
maximum
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a maximum
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 of one and
half
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a half
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million
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visitors
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. Next three years , the numbers
stalised
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peaked
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this
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 point.
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 , the
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number of travelers
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travelers
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travellers
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 who stay
at
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on
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cruise
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cruises
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go
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has gone
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 up. In the
last
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 three years , the leader changed and
count
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the count
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 of ship
travelers
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travellers
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 took
lead
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the lead
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 and in 2017 hit a high. The total
visitors
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 count climbed gradually, but in the time frame from 2012 and 2015 surged and reached more than 2.5
million
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visitors
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 that year in
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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. But in 2016 stabilised , before
surge
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the surge
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 in 2017 and hit a maximum of 3.5
million
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travelers
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travellers
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surged" was used 2 times.
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