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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comprisions where relevant.

The given table illustrates the information on the
subway
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railway
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 system in six cities.
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, the table shows that the oldest and longest underground
railway
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systems
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system
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 is located in
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London, UK.
Tokyo
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 has the biggest
passenger
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number of passengers
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 per
year
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.
Kyoto
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 and Los Angeles are generally less popular than
others
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 cities. The first underground
railway
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systems
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 was opened in 1863 in
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London
then
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was
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opened in
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Paris in 1900.
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subway
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railway
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systems
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 was opened in 1927 in
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Tokyo
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 and there is the most famous
subway
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, we can see it when we see the given table, there is display that 1927
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millions passenger
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million passengers
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 per
year
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 visited
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subway
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the subway
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. After the
Tokyo
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 was opened in
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Washington DC in 1976.
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 was opened in
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Kyoto
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 in 1981 and
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last
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 in
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Los Angeles in 2001. The longest underground
railway
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systems
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system
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 in
the
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London
about
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 394
kilometers
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kilometres
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of route
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long
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. The smallest underground
railway
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systems
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system
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 in
the
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Kyoto
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about
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is about
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 28
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of route. The most popular
subway
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 in
Tokyo
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 about 1927
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millions
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million
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passengers
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 per
year
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. The
subway
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 in
the
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Paris
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also
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 extremely popular about 1191
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millions
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million
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passengers
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 per
year
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. The
less
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 popular
using
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the
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subway
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 in
Kyoto
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about
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has about
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 45
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millions
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million
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passengers
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 per
year
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. After
Kyoto
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 less popular using the
subway
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 in Los Angeles about 50
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millions
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million
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passengers
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 per
year
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.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words subway, railway, systems, tokyo, year, kyoto, millions, passengers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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