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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comprisions where relevant.

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The given table illustrates the information on the
subway
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railway
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 system in six cities.
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, the table shows that the oldest and longest underground
railway
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systems
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system
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 is located in
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London, UK.
Tokyo
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 has the biggest
passenger
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number of passengers
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 per
year
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.
Kyoto
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 and Los Angeles are generally less popular than
others
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 cities. The first underground
railway
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systems
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system
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 was opened in 1863 in
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London
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was
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opened in
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Paris in 1900.
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subway
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railway
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systems
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 was opened in 1927 in
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Tokyo
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 and there is the most famous
subway
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, we can see it when we see the given table, there is display that 1927
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millions passenger
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million passengers
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 per
year
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 visited
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subway
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the subway
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. After the
Tokyo
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 was opened in
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Washington DC in 1976.
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Kyoto
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 in 1981 and
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last
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 in
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Los Angeles in 2001. The longest underground
railway
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systems
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system
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 in
the
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London
about
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 394
kilometers
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kilometres
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of route
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long
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. The smallest underground
railway
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systems
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system
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 in
the
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Kyoto
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about
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is about
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 28
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of route. The most popular
subway
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 in
Tokyo
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 about 1927
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millions
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million
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passengers
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 per
year
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. The
subway
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 in
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Paris
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also
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 extremely popular about 1191
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millions
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million
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passengers
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 per
year
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. The
less
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 popular
using
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the
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subway
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 in
Kyoto
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about
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has about
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 45
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millions
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million
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passengers
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 per
year
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. After
Kyoto
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 less popular using the
subway
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 in Los Angeles about 50
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millions
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million
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passengers
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 per
year
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.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words subway, railway, systems, tokyo, year, kyoto, millions, passengers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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