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The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make cımoarisons where relevant.

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The line chart illustrates the numbers of
people
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 who joined certain activities throughout the period from 2000 to 2020 at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia.
Overall
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, the
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 of participants in Film Club and Martial Arts remained constant throughout the given period.
While
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 the
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 of
people
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 who joined Amateur Dramatics generally decreased, there was an increase in
people
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 who participated in Table Tennis and Musical Performances. The
number
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 of participants for Film Club and Martial Arts remained stable at around 65 for Film Club and about 35 for Martial Arts. Based on the chart, it is evident that the
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 of
people
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 who took part in Amateur Dramatics experienced a slight rise from about 26 in 2000 to around 30 in 2005 before dropping steadily to below 10 in 2020.
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, we can see that the participation of Table Tennis and Musical Performance witnessed an upward trend from 2000 to 2020. Musical Performance experienced a gradual increase in participation from 0 in 2005 to just below 20 in 2020,
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 there was a slight growth in participation for Table Tennis from around 18 in 2000 to about 20 in 2010 before experiencing a sharp growth to over 50 in 2020.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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