Your friend is unsure whether to continue studying at university or start working.Write a letter to your friend .In your letter Acknowladge their dilemma and express understanding Provide advice on the benefits of both options Suggest what you think would be the best choice for them and explain why

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Dear Diana, I hope all is good with you and with your health.I understand that
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you are
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from
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these two situations.But
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think
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you will
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the best one for you. On the one hand,both of them have
advanages
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advantages
.First of all,if you
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continue studying you have deep
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knowledge
in
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field.
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, you will be
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specialist in
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field.
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,if you
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working
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somewhere,you can have more work experience and have not got any troubles related to money.
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,
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think
continueing
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continuing
study would be the best choice for you.
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,if you are highly educated there are more and more job opportunities for you.
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,you can earn much more money.But if you
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problem
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a problem
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with
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your social
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status you can get
part-time
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a part-time
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job somewhere near your university.But
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you are able to study
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on
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a day shift and work
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the night
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shift.
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is your choice.I can not say anything about it. With best wishes, Bella

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coherence
Consider improving your punctuation and spacing for better clarity.
task achievement
Try to develop your paragraphs more fully by including more specific examples or details.
task achievement
You show genuine understanding of your friend's situation and provide thoughtful advice.
coherence
The letter is structured with clear paragraphs, which helps in following your ideas.
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