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More and more business meetings are taking place online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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 contemporary world, technological advancement has been drastically rising and it eliminates the need
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 in-person
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. Today, most
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business
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meetings
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 are conducted
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online since many
people
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believes
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 it is convenient. In
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 essay, I will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of online
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meetings
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 in detail. On the one hand, development in instantaneous communications
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 as Instagram and Facebook makes our lives easier especially for
business
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 persons. Today,
people
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 can conduct a
business
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 meeting or propose a
business
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 idea to
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investors who are sitting
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other
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 side of the world with the help of online platforms.
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, it can reduce the cost of travel and time.
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, The U.K and India trade summit was held online with both country's presidents and it was a successful meeting since it generated 30 billion dollars.
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, attending a meeting in one's own place
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online can reduce
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anxiety and restlessness since most
people
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 are overwhelmed
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 offline group
discussion
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discussions
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.
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, technologies cannot be trusted in important
business
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meetings
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 because unfortunate events
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 as poor connectivity of
internet
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the internet
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 and disturbances from family members can negatively impact the discussion.
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, Any glitches in
communication
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the communication
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 application can entirely affect the company's
meeting
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meetings
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 and lead to
dissappointment
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disappointment
 with the board members.
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, virtual and voice call
meetings
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 can be hacked and it can hinder
company's
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a company's
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 performance from competitors. An example
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 a hacker from China
hacked
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 the details from
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the Indian
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 Defence Minister meeting with officials and sold
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 Market. So, important discussions should be avoided
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online. In conclusion, even though online and virtual
meetings
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 can significantly reduce the time and effort it
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 poses threats
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 as information leakage through hacking.
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, poor internet connectivity and disturbances from the environment can hinder the online meeting goal. So,
people
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 should conduct important
meetings
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in
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offline rather than online.

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Work on developing a clearer logical structure in your essay. Transition words and signposting can help guide the reader through your arguments more smoothly.
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Try to provide more comprehensive ideas and nuanced arguments in your body paragraphs to strengthen your overall response.
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Ensure that your examples are clearly linked to the points you are making to enhance relevance and specificity.
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You’ve successfully identified both advantages and disadvantages of online meetings, which shows a balanced understanding of the topic.
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Your use of examples, such as the U.K and India trade summit, adds depth to your arguments and provides real-world context.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • cost-saving
  • time-saving
  • increased participation
  • flexibility
  • technical difficulties
  • lack of personal connection
  • distractions
  • limited interaction
  • language barriers
  • cultural differences
  • connectivity issues
  • audio/video problems
  • disrupt the flow
  • building rapport
  • non-verbal cues
  • reduced focus
  • spontaneous interaction
  • exchange of ideas
  • collaboration
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