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The chart below gives the distribution of worldwide car sharing schemes (%) in 2008 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.

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The chart shows the distribution of global
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car sharing
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 schemes(%) in 2008 and 2016. There are
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of
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Europe
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 and the lowest
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of
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 South
America
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 in 2008 and
a
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 North
America
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 and the lowest
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of
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America
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 in 2016.
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are
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 a high
numer
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number
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of
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usage
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north
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countries
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 in 2008 and 2016.
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a
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of
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 and the lowest
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in
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 South
America
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a
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the
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number
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America
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 in 2016. For 2008, there are around 59% of
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usage
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 1% of
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usage
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 in South
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, there are around 31% and 2% of
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usage
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 in North
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 and South
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 respectively.
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, there
are
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 a high
numer
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number
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of
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in
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car sharing
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car-sharing
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usage
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north
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northern
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south
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countries
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 in 2008 and 2016. South
countries
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such
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 as South
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, Australia and Asia's
car
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 sharing percentage all are around 1
to3
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to 3
% in 2008 and 2 to 5% in 2016 which increased slowly.
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, North
countries
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 like North
America
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Europe
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's
car
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 sharing
percentage
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are
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 31% and 59%
sperately
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separately
 in 2008 and 51% and 33% respectively in 2016.
Last
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 but not least, it demonstrates the rate of
car
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 sharing percentage in the world.
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, there are
a
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apply
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highest
number
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 of
Europe
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 and the lowest
number
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of
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in
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 South
America
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 in 2008 and
a
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the
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number
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in
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America
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 and the lowest
number
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of
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in
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America
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 in 2016.
Therefore
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, there
are
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is
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 a high
numer
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number
 gap
of
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in
show examples
 Global
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car sharing
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car-sharing
show examples
usage
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 between
north
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northern
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 and
south
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southern
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countries
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 in 2008 and 2016.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, number, europe, america, usage, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 12 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distribution
  • Global car sharing schemes
  • Changes over time
  • Geographical regions
  • Percentage share
  • Popularity and availability
  • Trends and policy impacts
  • Emerging markets
  • Diversification
  • Even distribution
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