Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, a significant number of individuals contend much tremendous creativity made by painters and musicians to entertain the society of the city. It is

inevitable

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truth that some people opine creative

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should earn income

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from the government and others

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are concern

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concern

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that these

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should be funded by particular sources.

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is a crucial consideration

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both sides and

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vital in the upcoming paragraphs culminating a well-founded conclusion with relevant instances. Beginning with my rationalizations, there are multifarious ways to justify why creative

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should be aided by financial

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. On one hand, creative

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such

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as painters create a lot of statues and sculptures to

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the city more attractive.

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creations

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depict the history, value, and

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of a city.

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, with their energetic work to decorate the town. The government should

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them with financial

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because of their skill.

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, musicians attract

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to visit the town.

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,

governments

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grant financial

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for painting equipment or music tools.

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, exploring ahead the topic. On the other side,

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don't have the responsibility to fund the creative

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but other alternative sources can assist them.

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, authorities have a plethora of compulsory

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for

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society particularly communities which come from poor families are more eligible to receive

support

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of

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foodstuffs and other

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to upsurge the

nation

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growth. To exemplify,

governments

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must

fulfill

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all appointments to develop the infrastructure, healthcare, medical service, education system, etc.

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, there are two sides

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debate and each of them has strong points but based on

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discussion it is lucid

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although

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apply

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for

governments

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to help creative

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by

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apply

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financial

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financially

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but

governments

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have other chores to be

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.

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