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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given table illustrates how often individuals in the US consume
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fast-food
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fast food
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 in restaurants from 2003 to 2013. In general ,we can observe that the vast majority of people went to the
fast-food
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 restaurant once a week in 2003 and 2006, and once or twice a month in 2013. If we analyze
this
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 data, we evidently see that the
numbers
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 of individuals who prefer eating
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fast-food
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fast food
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 every day
were
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 less than 5% during the given period,
as well as
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 the percentage of people who had never eaten
last
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ones
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.
On the other hand
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, amount of customers who like
intake
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to consume
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this
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 food several times a week
were
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 17%,20% and 16% in 2003, 2006 and 2016 respectively. In comparison, members who went to the restaurants a few times a year were 13% in 2003 and 15% in 2006
as well as
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 2013. In
conclusion
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 I would like to summarize that the
numbers
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number
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 of people who used restaurants with
the
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apply
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fast-food
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fast food
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 changed slightly in the given period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fast-food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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