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You stayed with your friend and by mistake carried home one of his objects. Write a letter and explain: - How you enjoyed staying with your friend. - Explain the object which you brought with you by mistake and explain how the mistake happened. - Mention how you plan to return the object.

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Dear Sahib, I hope you're doing great and enjoying snow days. It's been a month since I
last
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 saw you but looking like a year. By the way, I am writing
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 letter to inform you that I got your watch by mistake in my handbag. Well, It was
great
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 time with you staying
in
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 your house. I loved your family and I appreciate the love given by your family to me. As
,
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 they treated me
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the
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same
like
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 you. I enjoyed the
the
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dishes that
you
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 mom made for me those were very delicious.
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, I liked the Duggan park near your house it is
huge
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 park where was able to play my
favorite
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 games. I'm missing those days. Moving to
main
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 point, I want to let you know that when I was packing my stuff into my bags, I got your watch in my bag. As you know we were busy
in
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enjoying
the
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 time together, I started packing just
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last
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 day so, in
hurry
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 I took your watch in my bag. I know
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 is your favorite watch you wear
this
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 to
your
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college
everyday
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.
Ofcourse
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Of course
 you are
be
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worrying about your watch. What I am going to do is that, I am sending your watch through a courier to your address. As
,
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 I cannot come to give you a watch right
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 time because I am
little
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 bit busy in shifting to another house. When you will receive your watch please let me know. Suman, Warm regards

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your thoughts more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea to enhance clarity.
task achievement
While your tone is friendly and suitable, slight adjustments in formality can improve clarity and professionalism.
positive
You conveyed warmth and friendliness in your writing, which is engaging for the reader.
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Your description of the watch and the circumstances surrounding the mistake are clear and give a good understanding of the situation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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