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In some countries, it is possible to have a variety of food that has been transported from all over the world. To what extent do you think its benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

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It has plenty of disadvantages. Worldwide, some
countries
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 are importing their daily groceries, which has caused some problems.
This
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 writing explains why imported
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 are not good for citizens' health and create political issues for the government.
Firstly
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, Imported
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 are cheaper than those made in a country, because some
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 have poor natural conditions, which makes it hard to produce and plant.
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, Central Asia and East European
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 have 4 seasons. During the winter time hard to produce foods and plant vegetables. During that period inflations dramatically increased caused by winter.
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, imported
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 only added shipping costs.
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, the biggest exporter
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 can'
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 prove their safety. People don'
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 know how they are produced because in the world there are a lot of
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 that add chemical substances to their
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, which people can'
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 feel directly but in the future citizen's health might be get in danger.
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, Government tax has decreased a ton because that country's currency value dropped caused of buying food.
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, Imported
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 are cheap, which leads to an increase a customers buying imported
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. Their national brands faced a lot of taxes and inflations. They can'
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 supply cheaper than imported
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 in a market. National brands closed and surviving companies didn'
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 pay more tax than before, which is making poor governments.
Overall
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, Imported
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 are cheaper than national foods but it is not safe for citizens' health and make a poor country. Governments should reduce their imported food and give discounted business loans to national organizations.

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Ensure you have a clearer structure: a distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This will help guide the reader through your argument.
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Make an effort to use a wider range of vocabulary and varied sentence structures to enhance your writing style.
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You have chosen a relevant and interesting topic and presented a consistent viewpoint.
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Your essay has a logical flow and maintains focus on the disadvantages of imported products throughout.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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