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Band 5

Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people says trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and towns, while other says housing facilities should be build instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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A few people believe that planting
trees
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 in the inhabited
areas
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 of urban and rural can significantly reduce
the
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apply
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carbon
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 emissions and improve the
environment
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,
while
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 others think that
construction
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the construction
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 of new buildings can help in infrastructure development. I strongly agree that planting
trees
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are
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is
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 essential to
maintain
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maintaining
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eco-friendly
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an eco-friendly
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environment
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.
The technological
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Technological
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 advancements have been drastically increasing and
cause
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have caused
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 more damage to the
environment
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.
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, the rise in fossil fuel
vechiles
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vehicles
pose
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threat
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a threat
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 to the
environment
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 by emitting more
carbon
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 dioxide, which leads to global warming.
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,
the
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climate change causes ozone layer depletion and
increase
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an increase
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 in temperature by 1° every year. To combat
this
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, planting
trees
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 around the free
areas
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 in the community can significantly reduce
the
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carbon
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emission
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emissions
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.
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,
trees
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 absorb the green gases and reduce the temperature around the area. Even though building homes in free
area
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areas
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 can improve the infrastructure, it can lead to
further
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 damage to the
environment
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 without
trees
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.
In particular
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, the
air
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 quality is greatly affected
due to
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 increased pollutants from housing
areas
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 and
lack
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the lack
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 of
trees
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. A recent research from Annamalai University found that inhaling polluted
air
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 is equal to smoking 4 cigarettes per day.
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, In India,
the
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Delhi is rated as
number
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the number
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 1
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air polluted
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air-polluted
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 state due
urbanization
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to urbanization
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 and deforestation. So, planting
trees
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 around the vacant
areas
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 of
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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 and cities can improve
the
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air
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 quality by eliminating pollutants. In conclusion, even though infrastructure development and housing
is
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 essential for people, environmental damage from
lack
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the lack
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 of
trees
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 should be considered
as
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an
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 immediate threat. To tackle
this
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, planting
trees
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 around the inhabited places in the community helps to significantly lower
carbon
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 emissions and improve
air
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 quality for breathing.

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task achievement
Consider expanding on the counterargument about infrastructure development in more detail. This would strengthen the overall argument and provide a more balanced view.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the connection between sentences and paragraphs to enhance the flow of the essay. Using more linking words and phrases can help with this.
coherence and cohesion
Work on correcting grammatical errors, such as using the correct verb forms and pluralization. This will help improve clarity and professionalism in your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction clearly states your opinion, and the overall structure is logical and easy to follow.
task achievement
You provide relevant examples to support your arguments, which helps to strengthen your points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban forestry
  • Green infrastructure
  • Ecosystem services
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Urban sprawl
  • Biodiversity
  • Renewable resources
  • Sustainable development
  • Mixed-use development
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Affordable housing
  • Density
  • Zoning regulations
  • Public policy
  • Climate action
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