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The line chart illustrates the amount of utilization of three spreads between 1981 and 2007.

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, the consumption of butter and margarine decreased throughout the

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given

period.

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, low fat and reduced spreads' consumption increased . On one hand, the utilization of butter was just above 140

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in 1981,

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it rose to approximately 160

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. After

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it declined to around 50

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at the end

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of the period in 2007.

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, approximately 90

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of maragine was consumed in 1981. After

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the

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fluctuated until it reached

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grams

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in the

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year.

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, the consumption of

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and reduced spreads started in 1996 with around 10

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. The statistic reached a peak in 2001 at just over 80

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then

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went down slightly to around 70

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in 2007.

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The graph below shows the consumption of three spreads from 1981 to 2007.

In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are so popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Older generation often hold some traditional ideas on the correct way of life, thoughts and behavior. Most people argue that it is not helpful for younger generations to prepare for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?