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nowadays many people ace unemployemet what causes this? what are solutions

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In recent years, the number of
unemployeed
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unemployed
 people has increased significantly primarily
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 advancements in technology like robots and AI and severe economic conditions .
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, I firmly believe that
this
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 issue can be addressed by implementing measures
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 as creating new job
opportinuties
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opportunities
 and comprising long
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term
 economic plans.
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 essay will discuss both the reasons and solutions for
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 phenomenon.

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language
Try to use a more varied vocabulary to express your ideas.
task response
Make sure to include specific examples to support your arguments.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that ideas flow logically from one to the next.
task response
You have identified key causes of unemployment and provided a clear thesis statement outlining your stance.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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