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Some people say that spending the national budget on soace exploration is a waste of resources. They insist that those funds should be spent on people living on earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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A lot of people argue that allocating
national
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 budget
on
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space
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 investigation is a depletion of
money
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 rather than spending on
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people to improve their lifestyle. I disagree with the latter point and would recommend that spending
money
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 on
the
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space
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research
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 is more beneficial. I will discuss the main advantages in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, in the race
of
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 modernisation countries are spending
money
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 on
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exploring
the
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aerospace.
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 countries
do
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 not do so will lag and
loss
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 their reputation in the world.
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, recently India has achieved a big achievement in reaching the moon and putting the flag of their country which is an
honourble
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honourable
 moment for the people of the country. Another worth considering factor investing
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space
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in space
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promote
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promotes
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 scientific
research
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 and discovery. Our own natural resources are
in
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 the verge of depletion sooner or later. Exploring other planets will help in the ways to find alternative resources for making
livimg
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living
ease
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easier
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of
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 mankind.
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, the benefits of spending
money
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 on
space
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research
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 extend beyond the earth.
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, I believe that investment
on
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in
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 aerospace
research
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promote
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 the
overall
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 growth of scientific
research
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 and discovery and
find
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finds
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 ways to replace natural resources with
other
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others
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for the improvement of
lifestyle
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the lifestyle
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 of folks.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly present your position in the introduction and reinforce it in the conclusion. This helps in solidifying your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Improving the clarity of your main ideas and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus can enhance coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure grammatical accuracy and appropriate vocabulary usage to convey your ideas more effectively, such as using 'space exploration' instead of 'space investigation'.
task achievement
You provided a clear argument against the notion that space exploration is a waste of resources and presented relevant ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction gave a good overview of your stance, which sets a positive tone for the essay.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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