Some people believe that parents should devote more time to helping their children with schoolwork. Others think that they should allocate more time to playing sports with their kids. Discuss both views and give your own opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no denying the fact that
parents
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must
spending
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time
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with
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thier
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children
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to help them do
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thier
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their

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schoolwork.
Howover
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Moreover

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, others view that
the
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parents
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should
supporting
Wrong verb form
support

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thier
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their

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children
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to spanding more
time
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playing
sports
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.
This
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essay will discuss both
view
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views

The singular countable noun view follows the quantifier both, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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and
exepres
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examples

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with examples. On
one
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hand, now the lifestyle has been changed to more
modren
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modern

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that
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which

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means more
confort
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comfort

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to
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for

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parents
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to help
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thier
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their

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children
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do
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schoolworks
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schoolwork

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. In
addtion
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addition

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, there are many
parents
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do
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who do

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sports
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with
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thier
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their

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children
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because that will help
children
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to do more work at
school
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and on
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thier
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their schoolwork

The words thier schoolworks seem to be misspelled. Consider replacing them.

schoolworks
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.
For example
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, when I was
child
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a child

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my
parents
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gave me
time
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to
playing
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play

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sports
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that
support
Wrong verb form
supported

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me to
success
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succeed

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on
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in

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my
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apply

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school
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because they
change
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changed

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my mood. On
other
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the other

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hand,
the
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apply

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parents
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must give
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thier
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their

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children
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more
time
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to do what they want
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

also
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and also

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to change
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thier
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their

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mood.
Moreover
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, many
parents
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want to
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thier
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their

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children
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achievement
on
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in

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thier
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their

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school
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that
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is the
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the
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a

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good way but with more careful on
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thier
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their

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time
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and tell them how
imoprtant
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important

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to
time
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order on
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thier
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their

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life.
For instance
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, when I was young my
parents
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told
Verb problem
gave

There may be a verb use issue here.

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me advice about
manage
Wrong verb form
managing

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb manage. Consider changing it.

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the
Change the word
my

The word the may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.

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time
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and that
help
Wrong verb form
helped

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me to improve my
time
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I spent
time
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playing
sports
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Linking Words
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also
Correct word choice
and also

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to did my
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schoolworks
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schoolwork

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.
To sum up
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, I believe that
the
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apply

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parents
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should manage the
time
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to
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for

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their
children
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and that will help them
on
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in

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thier
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their

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school
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Linking Words
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

also
Correct word choice
and also

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on
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in

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there
Replace the word
their

The word there may be used incorrectly. Review the following notes to determine the appropriate usage for your context.

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life.
Although
Linking Words

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, the
parents
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must tell them about spending the
time
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on
Change preposition
in

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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good
Change the article
a good

It appears that the phrase good way may not contain the correct article usage. Consider making a change.

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way and help them to support them to do more on their
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schoolworks
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schoolwork

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and
on
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in

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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

thier
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their

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life.

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language reference
There are several spelling errors and grammatical issues that weaken your overall message. Try to proofread your essay to target common mistakes such as 'howover' (however), 'thier' (their), and 'spanding' (spending).
idea development
Your points are relatively clear but could be expanded further for better depth. For instance, when discussing the importance of both study and sports, including specific advantages each brings to a child's development could strengthen your argument.
cohesion and coherence
Make sure you provide a more balanced representation of both views in the body paragraphs. Ensure that each side of the argument is given equal attention and developed clearly.
task response
You have successfully identified the two views regarding parental involvement in children's education and sports, which shows good task understanding.
idea support
Your use of personal examples adds authenticity to your argument and helps engage the reader.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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