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The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones all around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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use
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with out
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without
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 free.
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life
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 for
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 and that has many advantages one of them
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cheaper
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, the
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people
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 and earn
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, if
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, The drawbacks of the
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people
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friend
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 his friend and see that enough.
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, I believe that the
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people
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due to
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coherence and cohesion
Improve the clarity and structure of your introduction and conclusion by clearly stating your main ideas. For instance, your introduction could more clearly outline the specific advantages and disadvantages you will discuss.
task achievement
Expand and clarify your points. For example, explain how online shopping benefits people more thoroughly, and provide concrete examples to support your arguments.
language accuracy
Refine your language and grammar. There are several spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'use' should be 'using', 'with out' should be 'without', 'Howover' should be 'However'). Make sure to proofread your work.
task achievement
You've successfully identified both advantages and disadvantages of internet usage, which is essential for this essay topic.
task achievement
Your use of examples, such as people ordering items online, demonstrates a practical understanding of your points.
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