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Band 5.5

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

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The diagrams illustrate the plan to renovate the Southwest Airport next year.
It is clear that
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 the area of the airport is going to be expanded. The number of services including travelling by sky train to the grates will be offered and the number of gates will increase which will allow more flights to take off at the same time. There will be more facilities to be set in the areas of departure
as well as
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 arrival. Despite the original check-in and cafe in the waiting room, a bag drop is going to be placed in front of the check-in zone.
Also
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, there will be a new cafe in the zone for arrival, at the same time, an ATM and car hiring service will be offered to increase convenience for the passengers.
Then
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, there will be several shops along the way leading to the sky train which allows the traveller to purchase stuff they need before boarding. More significantly, there will be 8 more gates available for boarding.

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task achievement
Enhance the introduction by briefly mentioning the main changes that will occur after redevelopment, which would help set the context for the description.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using more cohesive devices (linking words and phrases) to enhance the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs, as this will make the text easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Include a brief conclusion summarizing the future improvements of the airport which reinforces the ideas presented in the essay.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear description of the changes in services and facilities at the airport, which indicates a good understanding of the diagrams provided.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • terminal
  • car park
  • runways
  • redevelopment
  • proposed changes
  • expanded terminals
  • new gates
  • additional parking
  • amenities
  • navigation
  • environmental impact
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • traffic congestion
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