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The diagram shows how small and large Venus Flytrap species handle small prey to optimize their use of digestive enzymes Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows how small and large Venus Flytrap species handle small prey to optimize their use of digestive enzymes Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 diagram illustrates the
process
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 of digestive enzyme release when handling small
prey
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, specifying both large and small Flytrap species.
This
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process
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 involves
in
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three stages trigger hairs,
Trap
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 snaps shut and nutrition absorbed. For the small
trap
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, the
process
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 starts when the
prey
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 touches
trigger
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the trigger
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 hairs in the
trap
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. The species get trapped to snap shut around
prey
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, Once it
enclosed
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is enclosed
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 with digestive
enzymes
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 released, Insects in the
trap
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breakdown
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break down
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 and in the final
trap
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 species absorb nutrition.
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, large traps follow a slightly different
process
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. When a
prey
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 lands on the
trap
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 and touches the trigger hairs, the
trap
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also
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 snaps shut.
However
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,
instead
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 of digesting immediately, the
trap
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 opens again if the
prey
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 is too small.
enzymes
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 don't handle small
prey
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, it thinks it may get difficult digestive
enzymes
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 on
prey
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 that may not provide enough nutrients. In conclusion, Small traps are capable of handing small
prey
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 to digestive
enzymes
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, But
in
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apply
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Large
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trap
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traps
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 are capable of handling large
prey
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, rather than small
prey
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, prey, trap, enzymes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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