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Recently, the internet is being used to get information on various aspects and to buy Goods. What do you think about advantages and disadvantages of this phenomenon.

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There is no denying the fact that, nowadays using
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 engine for looking for information.
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 is a commonly held belief that, using
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the browser
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as
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is
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 a way
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to find
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 facts or more resources. There is
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 an argument that way to purchasing
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offer
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offers
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 user
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friendly
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data and ideas
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the purchasing
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a
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apply
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diffrents
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different
benefit
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benefits
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such
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 as lower
price
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prices
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, and good quality.
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, If you decide to
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lamp
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China
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, via
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the internet
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internet
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 you can buy it
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within
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 10 minutes from your house. On
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the other
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 hand, allows
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individuals to access amount of information
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 any
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 without age restriction. It is
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may be
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 fake.
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Moreover
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, there is no trust issue
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 both good and bad
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effects
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task achievement
Improve the clarity of your introduction by clearly stating your opinion and outlining the main points you will discuss in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the organization of your paragraphs. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence that relates directly to your main argument.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your main points, particularly regarding the disadvantages. Examples help strengthen your arguments and make them more relatable.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your conclusion summarizes your main points and restates your opinion clearly. It should tie back to your introduction for better coherence.
task achievement
You have recognized both advantages and disadvantages of using the internet, which is essential for a balanced discussion.
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Some of your examples, like buying products online, can be relevant to the topic, showing an understanding of practical applications of the internet.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • information overload
  • democratization of knowledge
  • informed decisions
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • niche products
  • global marketplace
  • privacy concerns
  • security risks
  • personal information
  • misinformation
  • credible sources
  • untrustworthy
  • local businesses
  • economic challenges
  • e-commerce
  • transformative effect
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