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Band 4.5

Some people believe governments should spend money in saving languages of few speakers from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a common belief that
conservation
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the conservation
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 of dying
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 is a waste of money.
However
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, there is a more persuasive opinion that preserving languages makes our world more
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 and culturally
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flourishing
. In
this
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 essay, I will describe both points of view and
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develop
 my own opinion on
this
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 topic. On one hand, some
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 that keeping a
language
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 for few speakers is
financial
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a financial
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 burden to our society.
Furthermore
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, if we want to protect the
language
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, we should have to
investigate
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invest
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 a large amount of money to make a dictionary of that.
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, in the United States of America, there were many regulations for
their
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 Indian
language
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. They
spent
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 more than 1 million
dollers
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dollars
 per
years
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year
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,
thus
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 the taxpayers of the US think
that is
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 not
the
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apply
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essential for their country because most
of
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apply
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the citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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 use English as their first
language
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.
On the other hand
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, preserving the
language
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 is important for
the
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apply
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culture
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 diversity.
Language
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 is not only
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a
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 tool
interacting
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for interacting
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 with other people but
also
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 contains the soul of
the
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a
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 specific culture. In Korea in1930s,
for instance
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, the Empire of Japan limited the
useage
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 of Korean for declining people gathering. Because Japan thought that the main power of
Korean
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Korea
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 was based on the
language
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, they announced those kinds of regulations.
However
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, there
were
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was
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a lots
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lots
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lot
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 of movement to preserve
Korean
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Koreans
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,
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as
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and as
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 a
result
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result,
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 we could keep our
language
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 from threatening
of
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apply
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Japan. Now Korea
have
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large
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a large
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 influence around the world,
thus
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 I think
this
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 is
a
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apporpriate
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why
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of why
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 we should not
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 the
language
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 disappear. In conclusion, I firmly believe that we have to make an effort to protect the languages, even
there
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if there
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 are few people remaining to use
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them
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. These
kind
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kinds
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 of regulations are seemingly
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a wast
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wast
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waste
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 of money,
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however
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however,
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it
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they
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becomes
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become
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 an investigation for our future.

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task achievement
Make sure to clarify your position in the introduction more explicitly.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more clearly, such as using clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammar and spelling errors, such as 'develp', 'usage', and 'dollers'.
coherence and cohesion
Include more transitional phrases to smoothly guide the reader through your arguments.
task achievement
You have presented both perspectives on the issue, which is a good approach for this type of essay.
task achievement
Your cultural example of the Korean language adds depth to your argument for language preservation.
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