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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the informahtion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the different occupations in the UK and their salaries and the table provides data on the average weekly working
hours
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 for each profession.
Overall
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, underground drivers earn the highest salaries, both
initially
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 and after 3 years,
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 they work a few
hours
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 among all others.
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 nurses receive the lowest payment. In terms of working
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, teachers and firefighters have the longest weekly schedules. Regarding salaries, underground drivers start with the highest income, starting from just below 50.000$, which increases slightly after 3 years to surpass 50000$. Firefighters
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 get relatively high wages, beginning at approximately 40000$ and rising to 45000$.
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, teachers track
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 way, their initial income of around 33000$, increasing
just
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 over 33000$ during the period. Police officers and nurses receive minimum earnings 22000$ and 15000$ respectively.
According to
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 working
hours
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, teachers and firefighters work the same time averaging 55
hours
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 per week. Police officers have more balanced working time at 40
hours
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, the following nurses spend slightly less time at 38
hours
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 per week. Interestingly, underground drivers have been spending the shortest
hours
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 at only 36 per week.

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