Many people think that living in the city is better than living in the countryside. To what extent do you agree with this view? D

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in the current era, where living is a worrying problem for some families today. Some people
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that living in the
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is more advanced than living in the countryside. In my opinion, I will agree to some extent living in the
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.
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chose living in the urban area because it had so many
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for my family.
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, It can be mentioned that
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the
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developed in terms of economics or facilities. All of
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very important for every household.
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, in terms of education, people often tend to be educated in the
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often better in the countryside. Partly
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more developed conditions in the rural area. And
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, In the town,the services or health are much better, it is simply that they often develop the economy better, so the equipment is always added continuously to serve the inhabitants.
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, I do not agree partly because living in a metropolis is often very extremely polluted from air to water which is an essential human need.
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, traffic in urban areas is often very congested during rush hour but for rural areas, it is not a concern.It is not as bustling as in the
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but it is quiet and peaceful. The
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issue here is the price of land,
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price. In the capital, low-salary people are often struggling because of housing problems,
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price
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high to buy or rent apartments for the family. In short,
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believe that living in the
city
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is better than in the rural
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,so you should have a
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stable
salary to live there

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coherence and cohesion
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coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
You raise relevant points about the advantages and disadvantages of city and countryside living, showing an understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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