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Write a letter to the local council regarding the plan of replacement of a library with a supermarket; You need to write the following: •Where did you get this information? •The disadvantages of having a supermarket instead of a library •Importance of having a library

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Dear Sir, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my disappointment about your decision
of
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transfering
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transfer
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Library
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' to a supermarket. I am one of the regular
of
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visitor
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visitors
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of
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this
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library
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 and gained abundant knowledge by reading books from it. I received information from one of my
friend
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 regarding the change of
library
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. He
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 working as a librarian for the past 10 years.
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, council members informed him about the decision without considering the people's opinion. I would like to discuss some prime disadvantages
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this
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 change. Most people from the local are working in
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library
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 and
children's
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children are
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 using
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 to enhance their knowledge.
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, the salary from the
library
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 is the only source of income to manage their families.
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,
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 need
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library
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 for reference and assignment purposes. It is one of the oldest
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library
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libraries
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 in the city.
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, many historical and special edition books are only available in
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library
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. Even many freedom fighters visited during
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the 1940's
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. So,
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library
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 has
rich
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a rich
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 cultural and traditional heritage. I kindly request you to reconsider
about
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the replacement of
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library
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the library
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 to
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 and drop the idea at once. I look forward to your
promt
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 response to
this
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 issue. Yours faithfully, Santhoshkumar

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task achievement
Add more details about the emotional impact of losing the library.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that all ideas are clearly linked and maintain a logical flow throughout the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Double-check for grammar and spelling errors, particularly 'transfering' which should be 'transferring'.
task achievement
The letter clearly states the purpose and concern regarding the library's replacement.
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The writer effectively communicates their personal connection to the library as a regular visitor, which adds emotional weight to the argument.
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The historical significance of the library is mentioned, which emphasizes its importance to the community.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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