Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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An increase has been noticed in the number of medical
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projects funded by private
companies
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. Some people claim that it is a positive development,
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others disagree. From my perspective, I believe that who funds the
research
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has much less significance than whether the
research
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is open-source.
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with, there are numerous
benefits
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when
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is open-source. One of the most important ones is that everyone
benefits
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from the outcomes of the
research
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.
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, when a private medical firm funds
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research
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and does not
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the results, only
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company
benefits
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.
In contrast
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, funding a project and publishing the outcomes, not only
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the company itself, but
also
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everyone who has access to the results. It is unreasonable to consider the rise in the number of medical
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projects funded by private
companies
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a negative development. Technology has allowed lots of medical
companies
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to skyrocket their revenues.
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, it is undeniable that some firms have higher budgets than even whole countries.
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, society should be thankful for the enormous amounts of money private
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are spent
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on open medical
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. All in all, there has been a growth in the number of medical
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projects funded by
companies
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in the private sector recently. For some
people
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people,
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this
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is considered
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a negative development. I firmly believe that there is
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possible drawback of medical
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being carried out by private
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.
However
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, I would like to point out the significant
benefits
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of open-source
research
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.

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Provide a clearer distinction between open-source and closed research to enhance understanding.
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Well-structured introduction presenting a clear opinion.
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Use of relevant examples illustrating the advantages of open-source research.

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