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Some people agree with spending lots of money on a large wedding , while others think it’s a waste of money. What is your opinion?

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In my opinion, all the people have a right to have a large wedding and I agree to spend a lot of cash on that.Generally, I think it is not a question of money and I will try to explain my assumption.
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, a wedding is always a ceremony and nowadays it is the same. If for someone it is not a financial problem to make the wedding with you thousand guests
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 why not? It is not a question of a bill, it is a question of some principles or a way to find a more reasonable way to spend your money. In my mind, it is not a waste of funds, but
on the contrary
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 anyone of the biggest events of our life if not the biggest one, so saving payment on that is not a good idea.
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, even if it is quite expensive for you, anyway it is worth it. We all remember
this
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 day for all our life and save the wedding photos which make more family atmosphere in a house.
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, it is
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very important anyone for our parents, who always wait for
this
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 day. It is a good opportunity for the family's connection too. What is more, it is a good spot for guests a connection to make some good friends and meet some of your friends with your new relatives. In conclusion, I would say that I have enough reasons why I think that the wedding day is a good reason to spend money on it and I explained my idea in a clear way.

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Clarify your main points and ensure that they have clear supporting arguments. Each point should be well-explained and related directly to your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your essay. Use linking words and phrases more effectively to connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
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Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. Examples from personal experience or common situations can enhance your points.
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Your opinion on the value of weddings is clear, and you provide reasons for your viewpoint.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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